Kauri are learning to write a recount using paragraphs and detail to make it interesting for the reader. Here is a recount that we wrote as a class. Wait until you read our camp recounts. they will be outstanding.
Kauri Go to Beach Education
Two weeks ago, Kauri and Rimu were on the bus going to South Brighton beach to learn about rips, beach safety, to be sun smart and to have fun.
When we got to the surf lifesaving club, we were met by Leah, Harry and Cam, young lifeguards who were full of energy. We learned about lots of things about the beach in a humorous way. Brayden nearly drowned inside but got saved by Shukoor.
After that we went down to the beach to play games and swim. The game we played was seagulls and trashcans. The lifeguards got us to make a rip in the sand. The first couple got washed away but then it worked. We learned how to wade into the water, duck dive and body surf. The water drift was very strong.
At the end we had a lot of fun but we were also cold, wet and tired.
There was a lot of effort put into this recount that I could read (Isaac). Reading this I can tell that you were all cold, wet and tired (Jedi). Next time, think about putting even more detail into your writing (Lucy)
ReplyDeleteHI Kauri, going to the beach is amazing. So glad you learned about sun safety. What is a rip?
ReplyDeleteHello Kauri i love the recount. But what happened on the bus back to school?
ReplyDeleteHI Kauri, I liked your recount. Were there any big waves? Kind Regards Johann
ReplyDeleteHi Kauri
ReplyDeleteIs Brayden ok? Kind Regards Ruben and Luke
HI Kauri
ReplyDeleteI liked your pictures and the way you used punctuation to make your recount easy to read.
Kind Regards
Riley
Hi Kauri
ReplyDeleteI liked how you used interesting words for your recount.
Kind Regards
Jodice
Hi Kauri
ReplyDeleteYou are good at using paragraphs in your recount. Well done!
Kind Regards
Maritx
Hope you had fun
ReplyDeleteHope you had fun
ReplyDeleteThat looks like fun I hope we could do that to, but just one question... Where is South Brighton???, Thanks
ReplyDeleteYours Sincerely
Wil